[b]kakashi wrote:[/b]
[quote]เอาอันใหม่มาให้ตรวจนะครับคุณเกมส์ อันนี้ผมรู้สึกเหมือนกับว่าเขียนวนไปมารึเปล่า ลองดูให้ทีนะครับ ขอบคุณครับ
[b][i]In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?[/i][/b]
People have different views about children should not encourage to work. While there are some job benefits will get experience and learning balance to children, I believe that it is better to support children learning from part time job.
Children who have parents are rich person. They are not to get some job because it is waste of time for them. Rich children will use time for study or tourism only. Some children think that it is more independent than working children. In term of work experience or learning children who don’t have work experience will lack skill of job responsibility and can not plan life activity because they have never tested skill on job. For example, my friend, he is rich person. When he graduated from university, he can not manage his job and work load because he don’t have skill in life arrangement.
In addition, I believe that it is more beneficial for children to get more profit. Firstly, they will get many experience and money from their jobs. Work experience can teach ways of life for children in the future. For instance, in my life when I was young, I used to work at Chester Grill. This job teach me that “how can I cope in urgent situation”. Although I can get a lot of money from my part time job but experience with this shop has more influence for my career path in the future. Secondly, job not only increase my capability but also can create social network at work place. I think that if u have network in workplace, it will take advantages for coordinator and relationship with other people.
What we can understand from this topic is that the children will get many experience in their life to grown up for benefit of society.[/quote]
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People have different views about (whether or not) children should (not) encourage to work. While there are some job benefits will get experience and learning balance to children (ผมเข้าใจว่าหมายถึงว่า มีบางอย่างที่มีประโยชน์เช่น ประสบการณ์ และ ความสมดุลในกาเรียนรู้ ; While some jobs may have certain benefits such as children can gain more experience and improve their learning balance(แต่ผมยังแอบงงว่า learning balance หมายถึงอะไรหรอครับ)), I believe that it is better to support children learning from part time job. (ประโยคนี้ไม่ผิดอะไร แต่ถ้าประโยคแรกแปลแบบที่ผมบอก จะผิดที่ว่าโครงสร้างมัน support กันทั้งๆที่น่าจะขัดกันครับ while her sister is a scholar, sadly, she is an addict อะไรแบบนี้)
Children who have parents are rich person.(อันนี้ไม่เป็นประโยคนะครับ Children (who) + ส่วนขยาย และส่วนขยายที่ถูกน่าจะเขียนว่า Children who have rich parents ครับ)
They are not to get some job (They do not need to find a part-time job) because it is (a) waste of time for them. Rich children will use (their) time for study(ing) or tourism ( Tourism น่าจะใช้ในบริบทที่เป็นเกี่ยวกับการท่องเที่ยว กรณีนี้น่าจะเป็น travelling ครับ – ถ้าจะให้เมคเซนส์กว่าเดิมนิดก้อาจจะบอกว่า travelling with their parents ) only. Some children think that it is more independent than working children. In term of work experience or learning (,)children who don’t have work experience will lack (lack of – น่าจะเป็น lack of practical skills or responsbility ครับ) skill of job responsibility and can not plan (their) life activity because they have never tested (อันนี้ผมไม่แน่ใจว่าหมายถึงอะไรครับ) skill on job.
For example, my friend, he is rich person.
- My friend, a rich person
- One of my rich friend
When he graduated from university, he can not manage his job and work load because he don’t (does not) have skill in life arrangement. (to manage his life/ does not have proper life planning skill)
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